LABOUR DAY
by Joanna Gilman Hyde
The Hawk West Desk Window 2:22pm
My Children are inching Their Way
farther & farther away from Me —
Peak is bound for British Columbia
Eliza has begun Her First Year Of College
but rather than succumb to The Empty Nest
I must grow with Them & be The Best
Care-taker of My Self —
be My Own Mother
Joanna Gilman Hyde 
You hit the spot right. However I feel you will always be there for them if in need also.
Thank you, Ben. Yes, I will always be here for them, and probably for their children as well (I hope).
🙂
I got your e-mail and wrote a reply, but for some reason it will not be accepted. I just keep getting “Error”. Shall I send my reply as a comment or do you have another e-mail address that might be more obliging?
I seem to have found a workround. Hopefully you now have my response.
No. Still no luck with my response. Your e-mail service doesn’t want to know me. 🙂
Thank you for your efforts. I think I have decided to leave “submit” but I would still be curious as to your thoughts on “succumb.” You can place them here rather than trying my email (though I am wondering what the problem is?)
I would be drawn to use “succumb”, not because of the internal rhymes (auspicious as they may be) but because I imagine (in the inner visual sense) shielding myself behind held arms rather than submitting to something by bowing my head (and therefore hiding my eyes). The internal rhymes are a bonus. 🙂 I hope this makes sense and is helpful and I am extremely flattered that you feel me worthy of consulting.
Thank you so much for your comments on this. I have decided to take your suggestion.
Thank you.